Sections 29 and 24

Arguement, arguement, arguement.

Be careful of my exclamation marks.

Alex - You have to absorb the other person's perception of reality before you can change it. I.e. - listen!

Alan - There may, or may not, be an audiencee of policemen listening at all times. So, once the sentences have been given, explore the idea that what you say, and what others say, and how you appear will have a direct influence over what sentence you are ultimately given.

This was a great session, with lots of work exploring specificty/detail in each line. However, to note the observations down here may, even unconsciously, cement the idea that the choices we explored tonight are the way to play a scene - whereas they are just choices. What we did find though is that any choice needs to be explored and executed in detail - we don't want the freedom to play being a trade off for specificty.

There were also a lot of line changes today. There will be more in the latter stages of the play I reckon. Sorry, but there we go. It's better!

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Half way down: Gandhi's line 'You killed someone? (Cut ******* hell.) This gets better and better.'

Cut the next two lines - "Tom: It was all blown out of proportion. / Mark: What happened?"

Three lines later Tom's line: Give me those. Cut 'I don't want ot talk about it. They're sorting it out.'

Three lines later. Cut Tom "They're not going to do anything to me!" So the line starts with 'I'm a policeman...'

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Tom's line (7 lines from top) Change to 'I was on duty, (cut 'there was') a gang of lads surrounded me, they started causing some trouble (cut 'I asked them to stop, they didn't) and I over-reacted.'

Think I've already given this but four lines further down cut the first sentence in Mark's line '(You killed someone.) What's this got to do with nobility?'

The first line of Tom's chunk change 'the rest of my group had gone into the shop' to 'the rest of my group had gone into the chicken shop.'

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Mark change 'Oh God' to 'Wait'

Ah, Alan just gave me a better idea for laying this out! From now on, those bits in bold are cut.

Four lines from the bottom. Cut the last sentence in Mark's line "They're not going to let you off. They started riots because of his death. I was there, I saw them." (So. I was there, I saw them is cut - is this clearer?!)

Next line, Tom: It doesn't make me a terrorist. I'm a policeman. I was a young policeman doing my job and he was a mouthy little ****.'

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Cut the bits in bold!

Gandhi: That's ok. This must have been what it was like for Nelson Mandela.

Is this clear? So his line is now: This must be what it was like for Nelson Mandela.